Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing a job, it is an important decision in a person’s life, even when the person have a short age and sometime is full of indecisions. Sometimes parents influence in their children decisions but others are children who decided by themselves. In my opinion, children must choose the same or similar jobs than their parents for a few reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, undoubtedly children must follow their parent steps, rather that choose a different way. As a consequence, kids will benefit from this in a few manners. For example, if a kid decides to study the same career of his father he will use all the materials and books that his father used when he was studying. Also, his father could connect him with the professors and the university in which he graduated. For instance, my father studied dentistry in the university of Colorado. There he has a lot of friends and colleges. This year I decide to study dentistry also because I feel that this career is for me. Thanks, that my father studied dentistry I will have the opportunity and privileges to enter to the same university that my father studied because he has great connections. It has been a benefit for me study the same career that my father.
Second, as soon as I graduate I will have the opportunity to work with my dad in the same dental office. Consequently, I will not have to spend money buying my own practice because my father has his own. Also, I will be amazed to work with my dad that has been my idol since I was a kid. The most important thing is that as the patients know that I am her daughter they will trust on me as their future dentist. Choosing a job that is the same to my dad has benefit me in a great amount.
Finally, I am of the opinion that children should choose jobs that are similar to their parents. They will benefit from that in many ways, not only spending less on their careers but also gaining experience from their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52367688022 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55941417945 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462395543175 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7915434001 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4736842105 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231215240638 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863580098828 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102583908136 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184647081946 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115746790192 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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