Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is better to have broad knowledge of academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject
In this progressive and sophisticated world, the Knowledge is one of the most central needs of human being whitch should be noticed in order to improve the quality of life. When it comes to this point, people have some dabates as to whether people should focus on one specific subject or it is better to have broad knowledge in many academic area. Personally, I agree with the later group and in what follows, two reasons will be discussed to shed light on this idea.
The first reason coming to my mind to substantiate my stand point is that if you have a lot of information in the different area, you will be more successful in the future.In other world, In these days interdisiplinary aproaches is very common in the world and knowing about various subjects would be a graet point to find a job. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Three years ago, after my graduation, I decided to work and prepared a satisfactory resume . I wrote my CV in specific feild related to my perofesion. After a while, I found that all the companies want a person with a various knowledge in defferent science like biology and computer science because interdiciplinary was trend in the perfect companies.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my stance is that working in single area can be boring. Abundant of people are not one dimentional and knowing about special subject is exhausting for them. In addition, Knowing about divers issues can ignite curiosity and it wold be enormously beneficial for the brain. There is fact that astut people like einstein are very peculiar to know about all aspect of the world. For instance, Professor Hesabi was my hero when I was a teeneger. He was very inteligent and had studied all of academic subjects like literature, physics, medicine and engeneering." I want to try every facet of science and working in special field can make me tired" he said.
In conclusion, having all the aforementioned resons and examples into account, I strongly prefare to have vast knowledge because it is more convenient to find a proper job and people have more beautiful and various world with knowing about defferent aspect of science.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...to this point, people have some dabates as to whether people should focus on one specific sub...
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Suggestion: In
...u will be more successful in the future.In other world, In these days interdisipli...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... work and prepared a satisfactory resume . I wrote my CV in specific feild relate...
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Line 5, column 604, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'various knowledge'.
Suggestion: various knowledge
...at all the companies want a person with a various knowledge in defferent science like biology and c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92991913747 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89815741376 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549865229111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1783146972 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.933333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20380742213 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616603439044 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771693971992 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126819149795 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601514566774 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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