Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Despit many benefits that living steadily in one place might have, moveing to other locations have numerous advantages that outweigh the living in a city for the whole life. As far as I'm concerned, changing our lives' place is better than being in one place because of prividing more opportunity for education and job, and so forth.
To begin with, in a country, the cities don't have equal facilities such as entertainment, education and supports for better career. In this case, migration to other cities could provide more option for us to live with. Take my hometown as an compelling example. I was raised in Isfahan, a historical city without an acceptable condition for the upper-level education. There is no university for my favoriate major, Electrical Engineering, as a result, I had to move to Tehran, the capital of Iran, to have a chance to study in my beloved major. Also, by living in a huge city like Tehran, definitely I can have a variety of job offer respective to my education. Therefore, if I staied in Isfahan, I won't be able to become an Electrical Engineer and have a job. This example demonstrates how it is useful for people to alter their living places to have better opportunities.
Furthermore, considering that youths need use various leisure activities such as playing in amusement parks, playing sports and watching movies in the cinema. In this regard, many small towns are lacking of the mentioned entertainments and for young people it could be more pleasure to live in an advanced city with better facilities. For instance, my brother had left his hometown because of the deficiency of the playgrounds especially for playing football. He moved to Tehran last year to have a chance to become a football player, due to the awful conditions of the playgrounds that in our town have.
To put it in a nutshell, I firmly believe that moving from a place to another location it better because of having more option for education and job offers. In addition, young people requires don't satisfy in the small and low aminities towns, so they are willing to move to bigger cities with better circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83945815997 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1712506696 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196395359082 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696039959603 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556398761117 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139334937697 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492670629052 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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