Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Traveling and Immigration are the most important pillars of each society in today's world. There are many factors that can affect people's lives. Thus they relocate to a new country. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether people should live in one town all their lives or whether they should move now place to another. Some people possess the conviction that the former is more agreeable whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the latter is more fruitful. I am personally content that this issue is multifaceted, but I'd rather continue with the second approach. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating my standpoint is that prices have been raised dramatically in recent years and it is hard for people, especially young people, to afford their lives. Some of them prefer to migrate to new places and countries where there are more facilities for them. This decision is a critical decision that everyone faced to it at least once a time. Consider my personal experience to make this point more clear. My brother is a successful businessman in his field, when he graduated from university he could not find a proper job for himself. He has two sons and had to work hard for their lives, but in our town, it is hard for him and his family to spend a normal life. Thus, he decided to move to a city in the North of the country and started his journey in that city. Consequently, he got a good offer and now his life is wealthy.
The second rationale reason behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that moving to a new city or country has some benefits for us. For example, we can familiar with new people and make a connection with them. We can appreciate other cultures and overcome the challenging of living in another country. Me, when I traveled to Tehran, the capital of Iran, I lived alone and I had to face situations where there was no family to support me in life. It brought me great experiences.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I prefer to live in a new city or country instead of spending all my life in one city.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, at least, for example, in brief

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63705583756 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6248772194 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53807106599 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1399245684 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7619047619 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150569915085 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382199778216 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447211552032 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105623473211 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359955077971 0.0645574589148 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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