Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to spend your money on an object that will last a long time than it is to spend your money on an experience (such as a vacation, concert, etc.) that will last only a short time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Questions surrounding whether it is good to spend money on long lasting things or to spend money on an experience have been ongoing among my friends since months ago. Some people believe that experiences play an important role and some others exactly have the opposite idea and think spending money on experiences is a kind of waste of money. In my point of view, every person should take care of his or her spending, but it is necessary to pay enough attention to experiences and devoting some part of income to those activities, is not a waste of money at all! I will explore my reasons in the following.
First and foremost, experience is a part of the procedure of maturity, I mean if some body does not participate in social activities, how could he or she improve his social parts of his or her personality? Participating in a concert or going on vacation with a group of friends or a tour are some kind of social activities that cause making new relationships and it is a way to learn how to behave with other people who are not classified as classmates, co-workers or etc. For instance, I know someone who is successful in his job, but he doesn't have the ability to start a simple conversation with someone new who he doesn't know from before.
Secondly, experience includes a wide variety of activities which some of them are crucial for mental health. For example going on vacation after a few months that we worked hard, helps us to feel fresh and rest for some time and be far away from routine concerns. Freshness helps us to have a higher efficiency and makes us stronger. I know some companies which have some compulsory free trips for their employers and it shows even in terms of money, it has some benefits for them.
All in all, according to the reasons which I explained above and many others which were not mentioned, I believe that spending money is not only a waste of money, but also is a very essential thing that we should not forgo.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i mean, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60451977401 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66225216332 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533898305085 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 20.1344086022 219% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.666492591 48.9658058833 255% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.75 100.406767564 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.25 20.6045352989 215% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181747869586 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861707291707 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773390374011 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106424181171 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779308468963 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 11.7677419355 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.28 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 10.1575268817 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.29 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.6 10.0537634409 195% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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