Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is easier to maintain good health today than in the past.
Since the dawn of humanity, it has been vital for people to be healthy. In this connection, although some people believe that today people have healthier lives than people in the past, I concur with the notion that it is difficult for people to have a healthy life. I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
Firstly, with the advent of technology, one performs most of the tasks online without physical activities, so they can not maintain their physical health. To be more specific, in the past, people were more active because they should perform all of their duties themselves, even rudimentary ones, so they had a strong skeleton, which is essential to deal with various diseases. According to my own experience, my grandfather was a peasant, so he should irrigate his farm regularly. Moreover, he harvested crops as well as fruits and delivered them to the consumer. Since he was an active person, he is a fit man even after 98 years old; also, his muscles are strong, and he does not feel pain in his body despite other young people, who do not have appropriate physical activity in life. On the other hand, nowadays, people are performing both undemanding and sophisticated duties thorough the internet, such as online shopping, paying bills, and holding meetings with a manager. When a person has a minimum level of activity in life, he will face different illnesses like high blood pressure and obesity; thus, he does feel healthy.
Secondly, recently people should deal with a wealth amount of financial crises in life, so they get stress, which is threatening their health. To elucidate, by increasing inflation in societies, people cannot afford their cardinal expenses in their lives, thereby experiencing a high level of mental pressure. For example, my friend had been saving his income to buy a house, but suddenly houses' prices have increased, and he could not cope with costs. Unfortunately, he has become frustrated and sustained a tremendous amount of mental tension damaging mental health. When he went to the doctor to tell about his unhealthy symptoms, Dr said all of them are related to his stress.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is difficult for people to maintain their health in today's situation. Not only do people suffer from health problems that are related to the reduction in their physical activities, which is caused by technology improvements, but they also face financial difficulties heightening the risk of depression.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06220095694 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74233647303 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55980861244 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7168449734 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.470588235 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110415835772 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035394858847 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379481706618 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754941977624 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022359576159 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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