Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.
In today's modern and sophisticated world, governments play a vital role in societies by allocating money to improve different parts of a country. In this connection, governments have different priorities for investing their budget. Although contested by many that the matter of spending money on recreational facilities is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded as both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that it is a real boon for a country to enrich art museums and concert halls.
First, it is essential to preserve museums and concert halls as they represent the culture of countries. To be more specific, the tourism industry will improve if governments allocate money to enhance museums because they contain art, which pertains to the history of a country and has great appeal for foreign visitors. For example, last year, I decided to have a trip, so I preferred to go to the city with historic buildings and improved museums. After researching about many countries, I chose one with the high-quality art museums, thereby realizing the history of that society. Moreover, when I went to the museums, I found that many tourists there, leading to increment the government's budget. If the government had not invested money in museums, they would not have gained profit from the tourism industry.
Second, people can achieve comprehensive knowledge when their country has wonderful museums and concert halls; thus, governments should dedicate money to these parts of a country. To elucidate, citizens can gain information in a different realm by visiting museums such as art, history, geography, and music; therefore, they are encouraged to learn them. For example, I take my son to museums and a concert every month. Accordingly, he has tremendous information in the painting fields and musical instruments. As he has informed about these fields, he has decided to learn the piano; otherwise, he is not aware of instruments and does not understand in which field he is interested.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is a great asset for governments to spend money on museums and concert halls. Not only does increasing tourism industry compensate their expenses, but also it provides insight into art for the public.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ovides insight into art for the public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94082931948 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3416651656 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.941176471 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264632975553 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829562630747 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517452147006 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164730890554 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408707341795 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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