Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, various events occur all over the world, and they whether have an enormous influence on your life or not. It is worth mentioning that thanks to the development of new technologies, most people expose to a large number of news in various fields and issues. Personally, I believe that it is not essential to be aware of events happening in different parts of the world. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, exposing to an ample amount of news about the various parts of the world may disturb most of the people and do not let them concentrate on their duties and responsibilities. It is vital that a calm and peaceful atmosphere must be provided in which employees and even pupils can focus on their tasks and home works, accordingly. Recent studies have shown that useless news distracts people and have a negative effect on them. Hence, people's proficiency in their task will decline if they try to know about events that occur in the world. My personal example is a compelling example in this regard. About five years ago, I started learning to code in order to handle optimization problems. Besides, I had a high tendency to read the latest news about the events occurring in the world. After three months of hard-working, I knew nothing about programming, so I lost my hope in this regard. Therefore, I consulted with a professional advisor, and he told me reading news distracts your mind, and you must quit reading news. Since that time, I have had no problem in concentration, which I owe it all to not reading news about various events all over the world.
Second, people in each society have various and arduous tasks to do, and they should learn new methods and lessons to do their duties properly. In other words, employees, teachers, and managers must spend their time to gain different information about their profession and career because they can use a limited part of their brain. However, some managers, who their business rely on the events occurring all around the world, must separate a particular time to read the latest and relevant news.
In conclusion, I opine that it is not necessary to know about everything that happens in the world. This because it can disturb and distract people and do not let focus on their duties properly. Moreover, due to the limited capacity of human being's minds, people must gain useful information wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...new technologies, most people expose to a large number of news in various fields and issues. Pers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80600461894 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65969202586 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503464203233 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1992943481 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.05 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.65 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202829137937 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650820509116 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467910834544 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126304360325 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286863808289 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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