Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
The question is whether people should work in there days a week with longer hours or five days with shorter hours. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however, I am inclined to affirm that working in the condition of three days can be practical and joyful. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that working is just a of the part of humans' life. Staying with family, meeting friends, doing entertainment and so on are points which assist people to obtain joy and pleasure. Now, if our workload is too heavy, such a circumstance can make us disappointed. Needless to say that an ordinary routine causes human beings to lose the power of their mind. When new challenges are not experienced or miscellaneous things are not done, a leathery and numb feeling will overcome people; consequently, Dopamine- is a neural messenger- will not work well. One should not forget that this chemical substance is responsible for providing happiness and concentration; in short, working for five days can impose depression and the reduction of performance on people.
The second reason for my argument lies in the reality that time is similar to gold in such a technology-driven world. Nowadays, humans are attempting to compete with each other for being up-dated. One of the most vital approaches for achieving this goal is the register in a variety of classes. Having enough and logical time will give people a chance to experience such practical classes; therefore employees will be able to optimize their performance during work. Besides, meeting different people with diverse backgrounds provides an constructive consequence for workers- who work three days in a week- such as improving their interpersonal skills or making new friends.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that working in a few days can change people's perspectives toward life. In this situation, people would spend much time with their family and friends and even more participation in different classes and events can boost up their function.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...overlook this fact that working is just a of the part of humans life. Staying wit...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'cause'?
Suggestion: cause
...eedless to say that an ordinary routine causes human beings to lose the power of their...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...eople with diverse backgrounds provides an constructive consequence for workers- w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, in short, such as, to begin with, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1108033241 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82666587665 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601108033241 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9546729128 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227525688256 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785208482541 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753390932818 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146220695044 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644869512203 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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