Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the era in the high developing speed, the development of internets is incredible while the transportation facilities are still remaining their position as the public's daily need. A fast web network and a convenient public transportation are all important demand of people. However, from my perspective, the government should pay more attention on the public transportation. I would illustrate my reason from disadvantages of unbalancence of the public transportation and the internet.
First, the public transportation is a more basic facility for the city compared with the advanced internet. Currently, the speed of internet can meet almost all the requirements of the public. However, the transportation still remains problematic. For instance, in the morning rush time of Beijing, the capital of China, the overcrowded problems could drive every white collar insane. Every kind of public transportation method are full of people, and leave alone the traffic jam on the road. The foreigner, if they had seen the scene of the morning rush time, are all impressed by the views that every cornor in the road, no matter the walking way, the bicyle path or the vehicle road, are filled. Given that fact, The advanced internet access is pale compared to a developed public transportation.
Second, without physical population flows between different places, the diverge could appear in different groups of people on the internet. Take the example of the city and rural places in China. Most of children in city enjoy their live just as every child in a developed country, and their value views tend to be as an ordinary modern citizen. Nevertheless, even with the highly developed internet, the kids in the rural area still have to face a problem: transportation. Without experience of each others growing environment, the gap between the opinion of the generation living in the modern city and those who grow up in countryside would expand into a huge extent. These gaps begin to reveal in the internet as the increase of arguments and disagreements.
In a nutshell, from all the reason mentioned above, I hold the opinion that the government should first consider to ameliorate the public transportation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
... of the city and rural places in China. Most of children in city enjoy their live just as every ...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider ameliorating'.
Suggestion: consider ameliorating
...pinion that the government should first consider to ameliorate the public transportation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, while, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22471910112 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07079905604 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544943820225 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 14.0 3.08781362007 453% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1798032531 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165101315082 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578919610498 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049614961648 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105491434287 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313005104225 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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