Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Government' s fund has an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to spend that money in an appropriate way to ensure our nation progress such as for improving the new technological innovations as the internet and make the public transportation in an easy and accessible way. However, I believe that facilitate people transportation is more crucial than the large web net because the latter has many cons such as decrease the educational level, besides, the social skills. The following explanations go as follows.
First, the social skills have a vital role in helping dwellers to fulfill their goals because they are the guiding lights that will lead them to their future success. In fact, interacting and communicating with people such as in the train or the metro will aid them to improve these skills, while, squandering their time using the internet will make of them an isolated and selfish person. For instance, I met a vast array of people while I was going to the workplace by implementing the public transportation, they gave me a huge lesson in refining my interpersonal skills through teaching me how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively, thus, such a collaborative environment enhanced my communication skills immensely which in turn, reflected positively on my future workflow and productivity. In contrast, those who used to squander their time utilizing the internet will be non-socialize persons and they will suffer a lot and will be vulnerable to myriad obstacles because they lack such skills because they will consume most of their leisure time using this innovation alone, moreover, that will humber the communication with the surrounding people, furthermore, addiction to the internet will create in human zombie unable to communicate easily. Consequently, the government should allocate money for people's transportation rather than the internet to instill the concrete basis for the large social network.
Second, people in general and kids in specific are obsessed to be up to date with the new technological advancements like the smartphones that have access to the internet and that reflects negatively on their intellectual abilities, In fact, they are tempted to employ their gadgets in an inappropriate time because they are readily available. For example, students may distract their mind during their classes with their devices, so, instead of focusing on teachers' valuable lessons, they will play video games or watch a movie and that have a hazardous effect on their development because they are still in the formative stages. In conclusion, it is not wise to consume the government' money on such as these innovations because of its effect on children cognitive abilities.
Last but not least, I can not oversee that the internet has many pros but, the advantages of the public transportation overweigh those of the internet. Therefore, I wholehearted believe that government should reassess their priorities in a way that will help to guide the people of our tranquil country to a comfortable life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2606.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27530364372 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05843047187 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52024291498 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.085999085 48.9658058833 237% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.142857143 100.406767564 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2857142857 20.6045352989 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.4285714286 5.45110844103 283% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160477565264 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062930620492 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478502231948 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103787400091 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419778205206 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.1 11.7677419355 179% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.1575268817 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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