It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Work has an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is utterly important to perfect our tasks and learn our young generation how to start to work from early ages due to their an imperative role in guiding our nation toward impressive progress. However, nowadays, people spend most of their time in at work.Moreover, these long labor days have a negative impact on their body health and their social skills. Therefore, I believe that reducing the work time is essential in both terms of improving their communication skills and enhance their education. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my opinion more clearly.
To begin with, it is vital to refining the large net of the interpersonal relationships with our relative in general and the children in specific. Indeed, the part-time jobs will provide the parents a time to spend with their kids and improve their social skills that have a positive impact on their future personalities. For instance, before three years, my parents used to work partial job. So, when they were at home at their free days, they created a friendlier atmosphere that helped me and the other family's members to express ourselves easily and clearly. In addition, this environment advocated us to deal effectively with each other and learn me how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively. Thus, such a collaborative environment enhance my communication skills immensely. In addition, such skills had a great influence on our future workflow and productivity. In contrast, those who do not consume time with their kids and used to work for full-time, they are more vulnerable to obstacles because they lack such skills. In conclusion, in order to have optimal social relationships, it is critical to have an only part-time job to be close to our family.
Second, it is critical to start educating our children from early ages because they are the light that will guide the countries to a success. In fact, the parent, who are biased by their love for their kids, are the perfect persons who can assist them to improve their studying skills. For example, when I was at the high school, my mother was most of her time at home in order to surge me and help me to carve the best basic and fundamental data. In addition, she used to encourage me to get the high scores and aided me to do so. Thus, she ordered my time. waked me up early in the morning and learned me to dispose of my time and energy in an actual manner. Hence, that what perfect me a lot and helped me to broaden my horizon. Thus, without her time I could not reach that success. On the other hand, the parents that work for full-time, they will not be involved in their kid's educational lives which will, in turn, this will have a negative impact on their intellectual abilities. Consequently, parents should aid their children in their studying career by arranging their jobs time.
To sum up, it is ideal to have a spare time in our lives due to its merits in establish a profound base of the social skills for our children with enhancing their educational abilities. Hopefully, people will manage their priorities and work for only part-time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in general, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81901279707 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72991261552 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45886654479 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9548306481 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.384615385 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0384615385 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123901312966 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430308573132 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526285389335 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967199827658 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262208096984 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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