Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate whether it is important for government to invest more capital to improve internet access or to improve public transportation. In my opinion, government should focus in improving internet access more. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, good internet access helps students from every nook and corner of country to learn more, which is one major thing that developing country often struggles with. In my own country, there are number of places where internet facilities are absent. Students are unaware of number of great resources they can utilize with the help of internet rather than relying on a single textbook provided by the government. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I spent my childhood in a small village in mountainous region. We had to completely rely on textbooks provided be the government. The place lacked a number of modern facilities including computer labs and internet availability. To improve the quality of education, government came up with an idea of e-learning. They spent two years in training, workshops, computer labs setup and improving internet facility in my village. After that we started learning online. I was so keen on learning about various aspects of computer that, later on I went to do my undergraduate degree from university in networking. Due to this approach, not only our education status increased, but also people became more aware of modern technologies and advances.
Secondly, with the help of internet, people can adopt scientific methods in agriculture sector leading to quality production, which is very important for overall development of a country as a whole. As I said above, after the introduction of computers and internet access, people started becoming more aware of recent advancements in various fields and especially in the field of agriculture. They learned more scientific way of planting crops and increasing production yield using modern scientific technologies. Moreover, farmers started collaborating with agricultural experts to bring sophisticated crop harvesting and processing devices in the village. In a few years, the whole new era of agricultural development started though hilly lands were huge barriers for farmers. On top of that, number of agricultural agencies constantly supported farmers and agricultural experts by providing necessary online help. This not only increased the production and contributed to overall country's economy, but also helped to enhance the living standard of people.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that government should invest more in providing good internet access. This is because; it helps students learn more and in long run helps in country's development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 896, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...roving internet facility in my village. After that we started learning online. I was ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40274599542 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01500939779 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544622425629 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8922260504 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.375 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2083333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242825853168 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684826559661 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815172913071 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173744948734 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112373461592 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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