Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my perspective, movies and televisions do not have negative impacts on the way young people behave. My viewpoint will be substantiated in forthcoming paragraphs emphasizing on two salient reasons.
First, young people are inclined towards being involved in various forms of social service, being influenced by the reflection of impecunious societies in and around the country by TV and movie plots. Now a days, there is burgeoning TV shows and movie plots based on the theme of reality reflection of a particular community or ethnic group of people. To be particular, they endeavor to highlight the grueling lifestyle of people surviving on such places. As a result, more and more benevolent people get aware and they try to reach and help them out. For instance, Last year my country was devastated by huge earthquake. Consequently, people living in village areas were highly affected as it was very difficult to supply necessary requirements to those people aftermath. Moreover, rescue operations were delayed as well. As a result of the news on TV shows, more and more people came together to collect money and resources for the people being suffered.
Second, certain TV programs and movies are based on educational themes, which is particularly important for children in order to help developing a sense of inquisitiveness on them. For instance, a movie called "Scientific Mind" maintains numerous activities that can help making a child more creative and motivated. It not only helps to guide parents how they should be treating and educating their children, but also provides a critical insight upon the detrimental effects on child's brain if they are pressurized and behaved harshly. After watching the movie, my parents started being alert and meticulous about various things regarding my little sister. By doing so, on one hand, they were be able to develop a very good relationship with her, and on other hand, it had a profound and positive impact on her caliber later on. This has changed young individuals mind that children should actually be treated rather than harshly.
All things considered, it is reasonable to firmly believe that movies and TV shows might indeed impact positively on young individuals. This is mainly because it urges them to involve in social activities and helps to guide making children more creative and motivated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21148825065 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89889201423 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587467362924 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9136730347 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.888888889 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177418469157 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567071038505 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743289674019 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120749976884 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482135544051 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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