Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is much easier for people to achieve success without their family members’ help now than in the past.
After industrial revolution in 13th century and advent of technologies, people has been obsessed with being successful. Scholars have always tried to find factors that help individuals become successful. One of the controversial questions about this matter is whether it is easier to be successful nowadays without help of your family than in past. Although some people might contend family today does not play a crucial role in success of people, I believe help of family in being successful is now more important than past. In the following paragraphs I will describe my point of view and the most important supporting reasons.
The first reason to be mentioned is that today competition for being successful in every field is very fierce and a lot of people are competing to be successful. So in order to win in the competition every support will be of crucial importance. Most of the successful people in different industries have benefited from their families support. For example, Angelina Julie, one of famous actresses, once told in an interview that before becoming famous her mother went to every audition with her supporting her and believed that she would be successful one day. So family plays a significant role in one’s success.
The second reason is that education in every field is one of requirements to be successful and to benefit from a good education you will need to be financially supported in a period of time. So families financial support is of crucial importance when you are not making money and trying to learn a skill. As it is obvious when you are trying to enter a specific field most of the time you do not make much money and family’s help will be very important in this period. A research conducted on students who have graduated college showed that those students whose families supported them were more successful compared to students who worked during college to earn the money required for their expenses. It is because those students supported by their family were able to spend more time on their courses and get good grades.
The last but not least reason is that family’s mental support is of crucial importance for the children. As we all know before every success there are a lot of failures and the family helps you to not lose your enthusiasm after failing. Take me as an example, when I entered university I was not able to get good grades in the first semester because a lot of things had changed in my life. However my family supported me and told that they are confident I will be successful in the end and this increased my self-esteem and I performed better in next semesters.
So to sum it up, family’s financial and mental support is very important for children to become successful especially in the world which in every field there are strong rivals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the past
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Suggestion: However,
...a lot of things had changed in my life. However my family supported me and told that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85743801653 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7544499578 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452479338843 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3950437823 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.55 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268668632616 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911486121514 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643024192992 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156535434339 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588209022192 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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