Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The job has a greater effect on one’s overall happiness than the social life does.
Working influences various aspects of our daily bases. While some people gain a significant effect on their happiness by works, others consider jobs as an improvement in their social life. It is so controvertible for people to decide on a specific side advantage. In my view, working makes people feel happier instead of a better social life. The job makes them more feel joyful in order to earn a bunch of money, complete their owned tasks, communicate with their fellows.
To begin with, works can create a bunch of money for people to cultivate a satisfying life. People can brush up on the quality of their life by money. For example, if people do not enough to eat after they finish up all owned tasks because of a lack of money, they are willing to buy any food they want with an enormous salary. Moreover, they can rebuild new houses for an ideal life. The considered accommodations include an exceptional garage for luxury cars, the large beds which make them sleep in deep, and a large number of cute pets, and so on. From money, they can totally switch their life from usual to ideal.
Secondly, people can feel happy to wrap up the tasks of their jobs. Whenever people finish up their works such as homework, house chores, and new projects in the company, the fact makes them relieved. Therefore, they exploit spare time focusing on their hobbies and studying. Take myself as an example, I had been working at a hotel as a part-time job when I was a university student. It was a harsh environment to work at the place because I was obligated to work more than eight hours per work. However, the tremendous tasks gave me the ambition to imagine that I would be in my house after work. Therefore, the job provided me with relieving emotions.
Finally, jobs produce happy memories for people because they can enjoy talking with their workmates in a working environment. People sometimes face difficult obstacles they cannot deal with by themselves. Thus, other employees encourage them to cope with the problems and give a piece of advice from their experiences. It would be one of the unforgettable memory in their life because of cooperating with each other. For instance, my friend works at a tourism company. She has an obligation to determine on a new project about travels to a foreign country, but there are no attractive ideas she comes up with. Hence, her fellows who have already worked at the company for more than two years give her a piece of advice. Consequently, she attains profound knowledge and trustworthy confidence from her fellows.
To sum up, people easily establish happy passions in their jobs. I surely believe that the reasons I claim this opinion is that they can earn a quite amount of money for prominent life, the mindset to finish up each task quickly and make deeply relationship with their workmates.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...beds which make them sleep in deep, and a large number of cute pets, and so on. From money, they ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 143, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('amount') instead of another adjective.
...laim this opinion is that they can earn a quite amount of money for prominent life, the mindse...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77530364372 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57257823909 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536437246964 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.109082767 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6428571429 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131991053317 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423183558421 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402674125751 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850393810822 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300820785255 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.