Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The job has a greater effect on one’s overall happiness than the social life does.
Throughout history, human beings have always been seeking happiness; however, nowadays, different aspects of one's life that contribute to their happiness has changed according to the complexities of the modern world. Psychologically speaking, job and social life are said to be the most decisive factors in one's satisfaction about their lives, but opinions are divided as to whether the role job plays is of more significance or that of one's social life. Even though the effects of a job in one's daily routine cannot be neglected, it is my firm conviction that a spectacular social life is a key to higher rates of one's overall happiness. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are
going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, people spend a greater fraction of their whole time dealing with their social life. Generally speaking, people are open to change and influence of
external environment to which they are exposed, and one way to recognize the relative importance of a factor in their happiness is by looking at the extent to which they allocate their time. In other words, the more a person spends their time on something, the more they will be affected by that. As a result, due to the fact that people are inherently sociable and spend at least two-thirds of their lives socializing, their social life makes stronger
impression on their life. According to recent studies, seven in every ten people who enjoy their job but suffer from poor social life, are strongly susceptible to severe degrees of
depression because they find it meaningless to work. On the other hand, the results also demonstrate that rarely does job sadden people who have perfect social life, which
properly explains the importance of social life.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that an excellent social life directly and positively affects one's job setting as well. Workplace is believed to be an impartial
and cold environment in which people get exhausted soon. Nevertheless, a socially skillful person can turn the frustrating work environment into a more friendly one, and, thereby, provoking a convivial atmosphere where they can enjoy their colleagues' companionship.
Not only does this enhance one's happiness, life expectancy and overall energy when they leave workplace at the end of the day, but it also enables them work more efficiently and productively, which, in turn, gives them a great sense of achievement and increases their
happiness because of their productivity. For example, back then, I worked as medical apparatus technician in a hospital whose environment was dreadful because of patients'
pain and diseases. However, using my social skills, I had forged rapport with a lot of my colleagues who acted as a boundless source of energy for me and made me happy all the time.
In summary, it is a foregone conclusion that people' overall happiness is affected by their social life more than is it influenced by their job. The fact that social life forms a greater part of one's life, coupled with the benefits it brings to their job settings, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, third, well, while, as to, at least, for example, in summary, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2637.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06142034549 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77494865485 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512476007678 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1310195705 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.5 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9444444444 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38888888889 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.53405017921 287% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269087019377 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101328926639 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780911590081 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107634681401 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791582980104 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.