Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The more money people have, the more they should give a way to charity.
At the beginning of the new era, an increasing amount of countries improve a lot among lots of fields, such as economy, education, and technology, so as to lead more and more people can gather more opportunities and gradually become wealthy. Under that condition, some people consider that the more money people have, the more they should give a way to charity. From my point of view, I disagree with this statement.
To begin with, contributing tremendous money to charity will slow down the development of country. Unquestionably, if people can always acquire alms and helps from their government and wealthy people yet without working, most people will choose to stay at home and wait for money. Afterward, whole society will lose lots of labors who can work for public facilities or constructing. More than that, people will gradually abandon their goal or dream, since they can stably gain every things from others. Undergoing these cases, this country might badly slow down their pace of advancing and progressing. In the end, when the government or wealthy do not have enough money, a great amount of panics and bad issues will also prevent country’s normal developments on every fields. Therefore, making wealthy people give their money to charity will block the developments of country and public.
In addition, devoting money and funds to wealthy people’s enterprises or business is also a great way to bring great effect to government and public. To some extent, if a country have lots of enterprises and stable native companies, these businesses can always contribute lot of helpful things to whole country, such as employments, advancing high-tech products, and so on. For example, in lots of modern country, such as United States, China, and Japan, these nations’ societies and public always can acquire some supports from their native companies, such as Honda company, which always can provide great quality types of cars and have high popularity around the world. Honda business not only selling lots of cars around the world and gain lots of profits, but also always provide wonderful quality cars to their own public and offer lots of additional employments to society. All the time, Japan’s governments can take the Honda as a symbols of Japan, which gradually let more and more people know the Japan and believes Japan’s made. Therefore, encouraging wealthy people to contribute their money to their own business and acquire successful achievements is better than give money to Charity.
Therefore, I completely disagree with that the more money people have, they should give a way to the charity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... as economy, education, and technology, so as to lead more and more people can gather mo...
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Line 3, column 936, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a symbol' or simply 'symbols'?
Suggestion: a symbol; symbols
...pan’s governments can take the Honda as a symbols of Japan, which gradually let more and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15186915888 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66572607567 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478971962617 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.7405851562 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.705882353 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316727725959 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13151981717 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149444239511 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312832434898 0.150856017488 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180743575682 0.0645574589148 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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