Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the importance of advertisements on people's choices in daily shopping. In this regard, people's opinions are divided as to whether most commercials make products seem much better than they really are or not. It is my firm conviction that commercials can make a change in all aspects of people's lifestyles and deceive them. For a number of reasons and, I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that most advertisements, especially on the TV want to attract the attention of consumers without talking about negative aspects of products. I believe that most of the companies want to show their goods professional compared with other products of another company and in this comparative atmosphere, some of them decided to talk exaggerate about the quality and options of their output. It is best way to work out of competition. According to statistics, fifty percent of people are award about deceiving approach in a lot of companies. But, surprising that customers claim they are located in the selecting path and most of them have tendency to lead and choose products with highfalutin. It is certainly clear to see why some of the factories step into an exaggerate show-off.
Secondly, advertisement in magazines or TV is so expensive and cost consuming, in this matter some factories try to show up their products in the high proper approach. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, I published my novel last year ago but I can't find an efficient market for it. So, I decided to take commercial in my favorite magazine but the cost was so high for a half-page of advertisement. As a result, I forced to write about my book in exaggerate way to attract interest readers.
In light of the above- mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that advertisements make products seem much better than they are. Not only because it gains attention of wide variety of people but also for optimal usage compare to the high cost of the advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, as to, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90285714286 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95365011123 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557142857143 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2077511248 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.941176471 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166636754746 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514490463458 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748819202561 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111383225467 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549851183808 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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