Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisements are visual demonstrations to increase the purchase of products or services or even increase the awareness of people from their presence. It is conspicuous in many advertisements that products are visualized in a way better picture than what they look like. Some people believe that in most advertisements, the products are manifested in a way that manipulates the audience to persuade them into buying the products. I agree with this statement, and I will elaborate on two main reasons to support my idea.
First, the ultimate goal for companies is to increase their profits, so manufacturers do what they can in order to increase their selling records, which gives a rise in their efforts to disclose their products in a way better than their reality. Managers and other people engaged in business activities always try to escalate their rate of success that is mostly defined by their orders and the number of sales. This process of increasing sales makes them susceptible to lying or concealing the truth hidden behind their products. For instance, I worked for a marketing company two years ago, in which my salary was calculated by the number of products I had sold. The more products I sold, the more wage I could receive. The policy in the company obligated me towards selling more and more of the products by doing whatever I can. I used to tell incredible stories about our products to the customers, or even relate some fancy characteristics I could assign to them. As a result, I sold more products, and my manager was satisfied, but I felt guilty for lying to others and trying to depict the products in a way that seemed more productive or better.
Second, there is a psychological effect in human minds that is Liking Bias, which states that people tend to like what is attractive or seems effective or even represents mutuality with them. I read this effect in one of my classes, and the fact behind this cognitive bias is that advertisement companies use this effect a lot in their efforts. For clarification, it is more likely for you to see people who look handsome in advertisements than people who are not visually appealing. As for the products, people usually attract the image the advertisements include in them, so there should not be a reason for companies to display a negative image into their viewers' minds by confessing about defects that can be associated with the products or their harmful consequences. For example, a snack company will advertise its products in a way the reflects their positive factors, such as deliciousness, being economical, useful for parties or gathering, etc. No snack companies display their products in a way that exhibits their lack of nutrients, unhealthy ingredients, etc. For the mentioned reasons, most advertisements show products in a way that looks better in the eyes of the final customers.
To conclude, although advertisements may include actions of manipulation or deceiving, they are beneficial for companies and even users. The advertisements show products in a way that they seem better than their actual specifications, and this action will increase the profits of manufacturers by more demand from the people. People can also benefit from such products, so the general advantages of advertisements outweigh their disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sychological effect in human minds that is Liking Bias, which states that people tend to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, as for, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2776.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06569343066 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03704900922 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467153284672 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 868.5 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3403594877 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.181818182 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196218972935 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698314762804 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456059723785 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147024314271 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393936846218 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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