Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of employment is a conspicuous ramification of the contemporary world. People are desperately looking for hiring opportunities, and some of these people do not endure the gaps between their unemployment time and the perfect job they wish for. Some people are inclined to wait for their niches in their dream jobs, while some others do not wait long enough, and they instantly grasp a secure job that is currently available. I am of the opinion that people should not waste their time waiting for an impeccable job, and I have a couple of reasons to support my argument.
First, people should not waste their time waiting for a more satisfying job, cause engaging in a secure job does not obscure other alternatives. Assuming that if a person who does not want to get a secure job and tends to wait for his/her perfect job is currently unemployed, he/she can still obtain money by working in a secure job, and still waits for any openings at his/her favorite companies or departments. For example, I always wanted to be a graphic designer. Unfortunately, I never found any chance to exhibit my abilities in this context, and right away after my graduation, I was hired by a marketing company for research purposes. It was quite controversial that after a month, a graphic related job was offered to me that was way better than my marketing position. I resigned from the company, heading instantly to the graphic agency. The example I brought up was due to the fact that people can work in a secure job, and simultaneously wait for a better job. Consequently, finding a spectacular job does not happen in one night, but waiting for it and doing nothing seems preposterous.
Second, people can meet new people in a company that provided them a secure job, and these people can connect them to better working opportunities. Coworkers usually hang out with each other and their communication is mostly constituted of work-related conversations. People who are not satisfied with their jobs are likely to interact with their partners as to admit their ultimate goals, such as their dream jobs or at least jobs that are more desirable than their current jobs. As an instance, my friend wanted to become a photographer. I introduced him to the marketing company I mentioned before for replacing me, and after a while, the marketing head proposed a photography-related position to my friend, which he accepted right away. He could not have to find his dream job so easily if he did not agree to take over my position in the company, leading him towards meeting new people and talking about job opportunities.
Finally, I think that people should ponder about working in more satisfying jobs, but they are susceptible to wasting their time or even money if they opt to wait in an idle condition. People will miss out on money, time, and job opportunities in between and the possibility of interacting with others in order to find a better job will disappear if they step aside and only wait for a better job.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, second, so, still, while, as to, at least, for example, i think, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80346820809 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87622840024 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472061657033 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7339930939 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.65 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.95 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360814332304 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115854108975 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779237598784 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239620494525 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281877326443 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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