Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The goal of advertisements is to increase sales of companies. In advertisements variety methods are used to convince people to buy products. Personally, I believe that advertisements show their goods are have better quality in comparison to the reality. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, advertisements companies have a wide range of equipment and facilities. With the help of these equipment and computers they can make their products much more beautiful and have better features. They can edit videos of their products to artificially add something to their products which they have not in real world. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a child I saw lots of cartoons. Between cartoons television showed a toy which have a very appealing appearance. I wanted that so much because they shown that toy do different things which I have never seen before that. I convinced my parents to buy that toys for me. Finally, when I got that toys I started to open it. When I saw that toy it was totally different from what I saw in that advertisement. My mom asked from that company why they are so different they responsed that they used computers effect to show that toy more beautiful.
Secondly, in advertisements people spend lots of money. In majority of advertisements companies use famous people. Celebrities use high quality goods this is a prevalence belief among people. So, when you watch an eminent person in an advertisement. You think that product have a great quality. No one casts doubt on what they watched on what they saw in that advertisement. For instance, five years ago I saw an advertisements. An actor had a roll on that. In that advertisement he used a medicine he claimed that he also used that for his self. So, lots of people bought that product and they used that. After a few months people realized that that medicine have negative effects on their health.
In conclusion, I think in advertisements are used different methods to show their products are much better. This because they use different facilities and computers effect and advertisements companies use famous people to convince people they goods are unique and practical.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...hat advertisements show their goods are have better quality in comparison to the rea...
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Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...ipment and facilities. With the help of these equipment and computers they can make their produ...
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Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a child I saw lots of cartoons. B...
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Line 2, column 722, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n I got that toys I started to open it. When I saw that toy it was totally different...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is is a prevalence belief among people. So, when you watch an eminent person in an adver...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an advertisement' or simply 'advertisements'?
Suggestion: an advertisement; advertisements
...ent. For instance, five years ago I saw an advertisements. An actor had a roll on that. In that a...
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Line 3, column 606, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...bought that product and they used that. After a few months people realized that that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92388451444 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99930299171 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46719160105 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3779421744 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6071428571 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03571428571 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203791790146 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566774566667 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536126594035 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14117944538 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292663204761 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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