Do you agree or disagree with the following
statement? Playing computer games is a waste
of time. Children should not be allowed to play
them. Use specific reasons and examples to
support your answer.
In recent years, more parents worry about their children. Due to the video games are available everywhere, and children love it. Personally, I believe that, video games are beneficial and useful for children. I feel this way, for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in every games, there is something to learn for children. They can learn different things for example, they can learn scientific facts, how to think to solve their problems, and the most important thing which is communication. In video games there are different characters and everyone has special features so you cannot become successful only on your own, if you want to finish the game and get good result you must work with your teammate towards the aim of the group. This experience teaches a valuable lesson to youngster. They learn from games, to communicate and work as a group, and nowadays these are the key to success. Therefore children who plays computer games can use that knowledge and experience in his future life to become a successful person. My personal experience is compelling example of this, when I was a child, my mother bought a video game for me, and on that game at the first of the game there was five different person, you should choose a person with special skill. On that game there was only one goal, and no individual can wins the game only the team can win. Because of that you should share your knowledge and skill with other people and help each other. I learn a lot from that game, when I got a job I become successful very quickly because I knew that role of communications to the success.
Secondly, children have sensitive spirit and everything can cause a negative impact on them, so they need some times to relax and enjoy their life. Games can do this for them, because when they play a game, they got distracted, and they forget their problems, problems like anxiety, problems they have at school or home. It can help them to decrease their mental pressure, and increase their mental health. Due to that children have good mental health, and when you have children with good mental health it also helps their parents because they do not worry about their child, so it is beneficial for the society. For instance, when my brother was a child, he suffered from anxiety, so I brought my brother to the mental clinic. There was a doctor on that clinic, she suggested us to provide video games which my brother plays them and we bought some video games. He played with them after his school. That games was not similar to the real world so when he plays games he forget his problems, games help him to gradually overcome his anxiety problems.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that video games have a lot of good things for children. This is because, they can learn and experience and because it can increase their mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 644, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... nowadays these are the key to success. Therefore children who plays computer games can u...
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Line 2, column 955, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...st of the game there was five different person, you should choose a person with specia...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 913, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[5]
Message: You should probably use: 'were'.
Suggestion: were
... with them after his school. That games was not similar to the real world so when h...
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Line 3, column 973, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'forgets'.
Suggestion: forgets
...he real world so when he plays games he forget his problems, games help him to gradual...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66601178782 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40405373752 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442043222004 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9341161871 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9583333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2083333333 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206954757094 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665335346242 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529689912266 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119630360039 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510207667324 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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