Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do – rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

For many people time management is a regular part of life. They want manage their time such that they can do every things they must do also that what they need. It is hard problem for people to balanced their time between use time for enjoyment and spend on work. Personally, i believe that nowdays they pay attention equally to their time. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in todays sposhiticated world there a lot of competion for every things like job, money , and better life , so you must work harder to achieve your goals. Because of this, you cannot just relax and spend too much of your time to your personal enjoyment. You must work hard for basic needs, due to the modern ruthless world. My personal experience is compelling example of this, I remember five years ago every thing went wrong for my families we worked for15 hours and it just help to provide food for eat. I still work for about 10 hours and I do not have enough time for spending that on what I really like.
Secondly in modern era, jobs or every things necessary for people to become expert on that is more complex and challenging than before. As a result you need focus on your job. Therefore, you need work hard as you can and manage your time properly. When there is time for personal prefernce you can watch television or every thing you enjoy, but when is time of working arrive you should stop your entertainment and go to things you should do. For instance, my brother went to the university seven years ago his major was so hard so he spent a lot of his time for studying and his only used his leisure time to spending on that he intested in.
In conclusion I am of the opinion that people use their time correctly and not wasting that on their like. This is because modern world is more competitive than before and every things became more complicated so become successful person is much harder.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...roblem for people to balanced their time between use time for enjoyment and spend...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...njoyment and spend on work. Personally, i believe that nowdays they pay attention...
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...mpetion for every things like job, money , and better life , so you must work hard...
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...things like job, money , and better life , so you must work harder to achieve your...
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Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...for eat. I still work for about 10 hours and I do not have enough time for spendi...
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Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re complex and challenging than before. As a result you need focus on your job. Th...
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...rn world is more competitive than before and every things became more complicated...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45505617978 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27004764701 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508426966292 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8185729289 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31436416557 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106892786213 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877691264397 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201156727157 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632787338582 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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