Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Thanks to the rapid growth of technology, businesses prosper in the progress of reaching their desired goals. With no doubt, they try to grab people's attention through technology, and one of their methods is the advertisement. As far as I 'm concerned, most of the advertisements overstate about the products which are described, and unfortunately in the reality the product's quality is not accepted.
First and foremost, many corporations are using the advertisements as a brain-washing method to target their audiences’ unconscious thought for buying their products. Consequently, the consumers will have numerous unnecessary purchases that hardly ever they use them. Likewise, due to the exaggerations made in the advertises, most of the time, consumers are not satisfied by the quality they expected. As an illustration, take one of the well-known smart phones brand, as an example. The respective company advertises about their phones, and as a motto, the battery lives are mentioned all the time. Though, if a person has one of their products, will know that how this phones' batteries are terrible. The batteries are inflating after short period of use, which endanger the person's life. This example demonstrates how the advertisements boastfully depict the commodities.
What's more, if a product has a noticeable quality, people will talk about it in their gatherings, which would be kind of a true advertisement. Hence, consumers will encourage the other person to buy that specific product. In this case, a high-quality commodity won't need any commercial advertisement to promote it. For instance, Apple corporation is very successful in selling their smart phones without any particular, overstating advertisement because their product has an incredible quality. In fact, within a family, in case of using one of their phones, the other members will buy the same brand as well.
To recap, I firmly believe that most of the advertisements show higher quality of a product which basically is not trustworthy. Based on the logic of the publicity, their responsibility is to grab people's attention to buy a specific product. Moreover, if a product has an effective performance, the other people will be encouraged to have that one, without watching or hearing any advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 777, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
... it in their gatherings, which would be kind of a true advertisement. Hence, consumers wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, likewise, moreover, so, well, for instance, in fact, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36666666667 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24263648256 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538888888889 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6912964645 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.684210526 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133137926046 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469041401475 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318391924765 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925860007327 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108457525718 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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