Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is not doubt that people that produce goods for sale they will need to tell others about them, so they can make profit by selling them. To make this happen , they need to have a good advertise of the products. I believe that, in most cases the advertisement is overvaluing the product. I feel this way for some resons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, advertising plays a critical role when it comes to sell goods. If the product looks good it will attract more people, and there will be a better chance for the product to be sold. For this reason, the companies are somehow forced to make the product look better then it actually is. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Couple years ago, when I was still back in my country, which is Albania, I started a small business, I opened a small store, where I was selling babies cloth. Of course I needed to let the people know about that, so they can come over to my location and buy things for their kids. One day I called one television to record my store, and have them advertise it at least the times per day, so the folks can see. I did pay them to add some extra stuff, like colors and lights, so the store can look more attractive then it really was. Thus, after one week of adtertising the store on the television, more people started to come over to my place, and I was so satisfied with the amount of money I was making from the people buying clothes and shoes for their children.
Moreover, having a good advertisement helps people understand more about the quality of the product they buy. It is okay to make the good look a little better then it is, otherwise no one would like to try the things you are selling. For example, my brother has a restaurant, and he is cooking really good foods there. However, individuals did not go in his place as much, because he did not do any commercial about the meals he was making. Because people were not so aware of this place, my brother was forced to pay a guy who was going to advertise the reastaurant. The guy made some flyers with couple nice pictures of the foods from the restaurant. He did use some photo shop to amke the foods look yummier then they really were. This way, people were curious to taste those meals, and they started to go more often to my brother's restaurant. This was a smart move for my brother, because it helped him make good money by serving more clients in his place.
Taking everything into consideration, advertising, often is necessary for us to make things happen. It is necessary to add some elements to attract people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, look, moreover, really, so, still, then, thus, as for, at least, for example, i feel, of course, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40248962656 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37128472046 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489626556017 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1399146995 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4166666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17480503656 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579239111428 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441199596105 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103576944036 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473359926576 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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