Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The widespread use of advertisements has led to increasing sales figures of products. However, I contend that the elaborate outer appearance of the products is not compatible with what the content actually is. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraph.
First of all, the package about products provides consumers with a view that what they are going to buy lacks drawbacks and negative properties. In other words, most advertising companies try to convince and attract people by mentioning gorgeous designs and perfect jargon on the cover. These two features sometimes intrigue customers because people will feel satisfied when they first uncovered the items after they go home. However, the fact is that the content is sometimes useless and lacks the practical utility that most of the public wants. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I bought a product which is advertised fiercely on the TV as a Christmas gift for my girlfriend, she originally felt cheering and I could see the smile on her face when she received it directly. However, after she examine the actual content of the merchandise, it turned out that I actually bought items at a comparatively high price compared with goods that are sold out in a supermarket. It is because the persuasiveness of advertisements and reliance on them trigger me to make irrational shopping and misunderstand what items really are.
Secondly, the existence of advertisements on products is often endorsed by well-known celebrities, leading to the fact that people won’t examine the content inside the package and believe them directly. For example, news from TV programs once revealed that a proportion of people buy tremendous numbers of goods endorsed by one famous celebrity. However, these aren’t actually the necessity the buyers need, and more shockingly, what journalists discovered from those items suggests that the endorsed products have expired for almost three months. It is because of the sheer reliance that celebrities are upright and friendly to their followers, the news that people are cheated by advertisements is ubiquitous in society.
In conclusion, people hold opposite views when it comes to the utility and effects that advertisements bring about. I believe that the endorsed products offer customers an illusion that they are better than what they actually are.
This is because there isn’t negative information encompassing on the cover and people will simply believe what they see and hear without examining.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25980392157 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92657732915 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519607843137 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4253883924 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.222222222 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145609056826 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475762304018 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283038009046 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081275589218 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393036450597 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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