Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own than it is to read or watch news presented by those whose views are similar to your own. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary society, with the progression of the technology, especially the Internet, more people get the easy access to the information ranging from various fields. However, not all people hold the similar attitude toward the specific issue, suggesting that a certain group of people will not regard other people’s opinions as useful feedbacks. I, on the contrary, contend that we people should value the different views which are against you as valuable for the following reasons.
To commence with, those who hold different views on the same topics compared with what you have thought serve as a mento in assisting you in delving into the in-depth of the same issue. In other words, those who hold different views from you are people who contemplate and make comments with their knowledge and subjective opinion endowed from their education background. There is actually not a quite clear boundary for whether who is right or false. By taking the other people’s opinions from their specialization, we can also take another perspective to completely find out the comprehensive aspect of one issue, which is helpful not only in the work field but also when interacting with other people. When I was a intern in the summer, I need to cooperate with another partner from different the different major to finish the assigned project. In the preliminary process, we sometimes hold different views for coping with the mutual challenge that we encounter, leading to a frequent quarrel and delaying the schedule of the project. However, after we meet each other halfway and respect the opinions of each other, it turns that the consensus made from the mutual discussion made the project highly acclaimed by our supervisor.
Another reason for valuing other people’s opinions as important assets than yours is in a way to help cultivate the attitude of modesty and the generosity to listen to other people’s opinions. People sometimes insist on their original belief solidly without taking other people’s opinions as suggestions, which makes those people be in a high risk of neglecting the certain subtle but important part of one issue. Under the circumstance, without the useful and constructive advises from other people, the final success of the project and goal of one person will gradually be far away from you. This thesis could also be proved accurately when I was finally willing to take the advices from my partner in my intern period. With the provided advices, I found out that something too subtle to be neglected. And after the revision from the errors that we both find out together, we finally make a satisfactory accomplishment. And just because we stat to listen to what other people expressed, we gradually become a much better friend.
In conclusion, it is indisputable that the opinion of one topic may to some extent vary from person to person. However, by valuing other people’s opinions as a more important asset than you, we could look the comprehensive aspect of the topic and also cultivate the attitude of modesty ,which are both helpful when we get along with other people.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 514 350
No. of Characters: 2543 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.761 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.947 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.522 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 717, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...teracting with other people. When I was a intern in the summer, I need to coopera...
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Line 7, column 286, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d also cultivate the attitude of modesty ,which are both helpful when we get along...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, look, may, so, in conclusion, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2612.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08171206226 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72195606138 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470817120623 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.1012860126 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.473684211 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0526315789 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170068648059 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611053420978 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416396211789 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12004076728 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353739113755 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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