Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, advertisement strategies have become one of the most important issues of advertising companies. It is owing to the fact that the advertising has a great deal of impact on a company's production and its sales. In this line of thought, some people believe that advertisements usually exaggerate products’ features. Personally speaking, I concur with the statement, and in the subsequent lines, I will substantiate my point.
To begin with, sales is matter. It is important for every company to reach its sale target, and advertisements are the most crucial part of this scenario. Most of the people believe what they see on media such as TV programs, the internet ads, and social media. Thus, advertisement companies can easily persuade people to buy more by creating unreal ads. They also manipulate customers' thoughts and mindsets to convince them and got them to spend more and more. My experience is a case in point. Last year, I decided to buy a high quality cellphone for my brother’s birthday. I saw a lot of ads about a specific cellphone which was supposed to have a variety of useful features. After a little research, eventually, I have convinced to buy that cellphone because it has a water proof configuration. After a while, I asked my brother about the gift, and he said it did not work after he took it to a pool and took some photos by it. Then I called the company about this problem, and they answered that we should not have taken photos with the cellphone under water, we merely can carry it under water when the phone was turned off, which was not mentioned on its advertisements. Hence, I have misguided by the unreal ads, and I decided to be more sensitive about what I see on advertisements.
The second reason is that companies try to get reputation by misleading shows. It is a accepted principle among advertising companies that as long as the advertisement could be justified by some arguments, the advertisement can convey information which is not completely true. Therefore, companies use this trick to gain reputation in the market and enhance their products' brand. Take, for instance, the car company, Alpha Company, shows that it is going to introduce a high effective hybrid car which does not produce any harmful gas. Not only does this advertisement attract people's attention, but also it could signal to other competitors that how far the Alpha Company are ahead of them. Moreover, the Alpha Company can make a suitable environment among investors and stakeholders by showing this type of ads, and increase its credit. Since companies can benefit from these misconducting commercials, and no one can sue them, they exploit this opportunity as much as they can.
In summary, all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that commercials are not as good as which they have been advertised. It is because companies' revenue is the most important factor for them, and also they can elevate their position among customers and stakeholders by creating inaccurate advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
... to buy that cellphone because it has a water proof configuration. After a while, I asked m...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t reputation by misleading shows. It is a accepted principle among advertising co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in summary, such as, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2545.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99019607843 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01639057025 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503921568627 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9291709249 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.8 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137259475888 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401891369465 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273296291486 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933371891325 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027600095087 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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