Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television
have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people
behave.
Throughout history, human beings’ lives have changed enormously since they inherently have a tendency to improve their lives. Television programs would be an essential factor having remarkable effects on people's lives. Although some people believe that television and movies bring people more benefits, others hold exactly opposite perspective. In no way could I agree with the latter viewpoint. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, it is undoubted that so influential have valuable information been that they have had a great number of positive effects on people's lives all over the world, yet above all, they have helped people to increase their knowledge in wide variety of fields. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous documentaries transmitting a great deal of information about human beings, history, animals, and so forth. An example will illustrate this fact much better, there was a time that I was sick and I had to stay home and watched television programs. Since my weight was high, my friends had suggested me that there is a channel which they show you the efficient way to decrease your way in a normal state, and after watching that program I could decrease my weight in an ideal form . Not until this incident occurred did I realize the importance of TV programs, for I do believe that had I not watched that program, I would not have found a way to decrees my weight.
The second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that television and movies take people's time and it is not a good entertainment for them, yet one the other hand, some people are convinced that it can be a great entertainment and people are able to release their stresses and tensions after stressful and boring day of school or job, because, television broadcast the programs which are suitable for each age. Hence, I do agree with the latter point, for I do believe that the more people watch the television, the better they can spend their time without spending a lot of money. By way of illustration, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that watching television programs are the most affordable type entertainment among wide variety types of entertainments.
To make a long story short, by considering all the aforementioned reasons and many others, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of television program on people's lives in every age. Not only are they able to increase their knowledge by watching various programs, but also they can save a lot of money. For this reason, I highly recommend that family member allocate some time to watch TV program because it provides an opportunity for them to make their relationship strengthen.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 806, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ould decrease my weight in an ideal form . Not until this incident occurred did I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, second, so, then, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97659574468 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78408316053 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487234042553 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.6313866231 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.1875 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0625 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111172030201 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433686268896 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457499477432 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720834476878 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207815846225 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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