Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, television shows and movies have profound effects on everyone's life, and young people are influenced more than other strata of society. While some believe that movies and shows make young people behave better, others believe otherwise. Based on my knowledge and experience, I totally believe that television shows and movies have negative effects on young people's behavior. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, young people will learn many inappropriate behaviors, and this will affect their personality. In a lot of movies, there are very violent and sexual scenes that are not suitable for young people. These violent actions teach them to act in the same way. I mean, when a juvenile sees that the hero of the movie is very powerful and destroys everyone in his path, he or she wants to be like the hero. As a result, young people try to solve every problem in their life with violence. My own experience illustrates this reality. About twenty years ago, when I was a child, I watched Bruce Lee movies all the time. He fought with everyone and always beat them with his bare hand. He was fearless, and I wanted to be like him. Therefore, whenever I was out and had a problem with one of my friends, I wanted to fight with them and beat them. It was a bad behavior because, after a while, I lost all of my friends. After all, they thought I was a not reasonable person to be friends with..
Second, movies and television programs can adversely affect young people's education. In the movies or news, they are always talking about celebrities, such as actors and rock stars. Many of them do not have a university degree. Youths who watch those shows get the idea that they are the real successful people. It stands to reason that they want to be famous and prosperous in a short period of time. Consequently, they lose their interest in school and want to pursue their career. Their future will be in real danger since, according to research, only one in a million actors gets to be famous and wealthy.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that television programs and movies have a terrible effect on young people's behavior. They learn many inappropriate things. Also, those shows will affect the youths' education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 992, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...not reasonable person to be friends with.. Second, movies and television programs...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... to be famous and prosperous in a short period of time. Consequently, they lose their interest...
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Line 4, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...ings. Also, those shows will affect the youths education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, after all, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74441687345 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49342490719 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0813723437 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5384615385 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220621312064 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595061628035 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725832188714 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153076739949 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787818329419 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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