Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is beyond doubt that due to the modernization of this world, technology has advanced that it entertains humans with movies and television. In this regard, people imitate what they see. There has been no shortage of debate among scholars whether movies cause a positive impact on people's behavior or do damage to their perception. As for the writer's opinion, I subscribe to the idea of movies really affect people's behavior negatively. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that children's language gets affected badly by watching shows on television. Since the use of informal language is common in movies, children tend to adopt it quickly because they do what they see. They initiate indecent talk with their elders which leads parents to worry about their kids' behavior. Moreover, the use of violation is up to an extent that children's behavior is in danger. By way of illustration, last week my son was watching the movie 'Avengers'. The language was so inappropriate that I had to force him to stop watching it.
The second exquisite reason makes me hold the belief that sexual content in movies creates an adverse impact on society. Itis worth mentioning that nowadays, all movies contain intimate and romantic scenes that cause addiction to watch these shows more in the young generation. Due to this, they tend to watch adult videos online from specific websites which affect their physical and mental health adversely. Producers add sexual content to entertain their audience and provoke them to view movies often which increases their profit. As a case in mind, in high school one of my class fellows got addicted to watching adult content. His addiction gotten worse with time and led him to end up in treatment centers for their health. Had he not watched romantic movies at such a young age, he would not have fallen prey. This example clearly shows my point.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that although movies provide good information and a perfect example of an ideal life, their drawbacks are way more than their benefits. For the sake of brevity, a couple of reasons are worth reiterating: firstly, movies effects children's way of speaking, secondly, sexual content affects young people badly. As a writer, I vehemently urge people to make good use of social media. By doing so, the society will prosper more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... damage to their perception. As for the writers opinion, I subscribe to the idea of mov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, as for, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98789346247 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57406284496 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578692493947 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1750952869 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5652173913 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9565217391 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47826086957 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195334632074 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526480563921 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378044061084 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126858428396 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596981806943 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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