The unprecedented burgeoning of technology in recent decades has had hung impacts on human beings' lives; one of this development is about movies and TV's program. Although it seems plausible at first glimpse that movies and TV often have positive impacts on people's behavior, especially youngsters, I would counter this point of view. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, day after day, movies tend to be more dangerous and exciting to attract more audiences, so it has bad effects on junior citizens more than others since they are in a special stage of their lives during which they want to make a model of their hero. To be more exact, directors should draw people's attentions if they want to be more famous, which is an inseparable part of artists' careers. In order to achieve that end, they have to produce so exciting movies that can attract people. As a result, more and more dangerous scenes are presented in these days' movies which have detrimental effects on the youngsters' behavior. In that case, the number of youngsters who behave in deleterious way is rapidly increasing because they try to copy their hero' behavior.
Secondly, being commercial is one the most significant principle of producing TV's programs, so advertisements are included with different types of TV's program. Advertisements often induce people to buy more goodsو even if people do not need them; this is especially true of youngsters who are more susceptible to these kinds of program since they do not have enough experience to figure it out. As a way of illustration, take my cousin who is a compelling example of that. He usually spends a considerable amount of money to buy every new things which are shown by advertisement during TV shows as he is only a fourteen-year-old boy. Consequently, nowadays, mostly does television promote consumerism in order to be a commercial enterprise.
To sum up, I firmly believe that negative impacts of movies and television is more noticeable than positive one on youth's behaviors, given the facts that youngsters are more vulnerable to dangerous and exciting movies and commercials which are presenting in TV.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 621, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
...s which have detrimental effects on the youngsters behavior. In that case, the number of y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, i mean, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01101928375 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96628854218 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548209366391 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6959298099 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.928571429 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217403797155 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711613424177 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493281683498 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127050913889 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031752063622 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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