Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and televisions are prevalent sources for young people to learn new behaviors, especially when these two sources are easy to access after the dominance of digital tools and online streaming services. However, without sufficient education, I agree with the statement that young people may be negatively affected by what has been presented in movies and televisions. I will elaborate on with details in the following essay.
To begin with, various topics are presented in movies and televisions, including inappropriate topics, such as violence and sex. Though there is the system to regulate different levels of movie contents, young people are easy to access contents that they are now allowed to watch via online services. Therefore, when young people haven’t developed the ability and maturity to distinguish right and wrong behaviors, they tend to imitate the behaviour that is sensational and are normally negative impacted. For example, my cousin has learned how to smoke after he watched a movie portraying the ganster as heroes who smoke all the time. This perfectly illustrates that young people can be impacted substantially by the behavior presented in the movie and television.
Furthermore, the influence of the visual image in the movie or television is more powerful and contagious compared to books or painting, which means the behaviour is easier to pick up by a mass majority. Considering young people are prone to learn from what other crowd is doing, it makes the images broadcasted in the movie and television easier to spread and trigger young people to learn from each other, regardless of the behaviour is good to pursue or not. Take the students I have taught for instance. One day he has leaned to say a certain word used to discriminate females and I asked why he said so. He simply shrugged and replied that this word has been expressed a lot in a movie he and his classmates watch together. He thought it is fun to say this word without further considering the negative message that is delivered. Again, this demonstrates that movies and televisions may cultivate negative behaviors when only the images are shown and no enough contexts is presented to educate young people about the problematic behaviors.
To sum up, I strongly believe that when lack of enough education about how to distinguish right and wrong behaviour, televisions and movies may impact negatively to young people’s behaviour since they generally accept what is presented in the big screen. Moreover, the visually appealing images presented in the movie and television make the negative behaviour spread quickly since young people tend to imitate what other peers are doing without sufficient judgment of the behaviour itself. Therefore, I support the statement that movies and televisions may lead to a negative impact of young people’s behaviour when no enough education is in place
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18936170213 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8054020514 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48085106383 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.5370258914 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225801091858 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798877737342 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047772802329 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154391111778 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284000876351 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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