Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people have different opinion about the effects of movies and television on young people. I believe that movies and television have higher rate of benefits rather than their cost. The following discussions reveal my stand and reasoning.
First of all, in the pas few decades many amusing movies and TV series quite amusing content have been created. These contents can be comprised of several categories and subjects which are very instructive in different aspect of a person's life. For example, a TV serie call Grey's anathomy is aroud the subject of a hospital staff and their lives. Moreover, not only does it describes a varies of illnesses but also it educates it's audience to different forms of sexual orientations which can smooth the sociaty's mindset around the topic. For this reason, watching TV series and movies are beneficial.
Secondly, although young people can be affected by the harmful content produced in some movies etc, there are rules and guidelines that can prevent this situation. As an illustration, under the terms of services of YouTube, any created video that is related to a child's personal life under a specific age that doesn't abide by the laws is going to be deleted. Moreover, hypotheticaly if a family wants to make videos about their daily life and activities which consernces their children, the comment section for their videos will be closed so that people watching the video wouldn't comment about the babies, both in good or stressful way. Because either way it will leave an unreversible effect on their mind. Therefore, even parents are not allowed to share whichever content of their children to public.
In conclusion, movies and television can have many benefits, and their negative effect can be damped by providing rules and warnings for creaters. In addition nowadays technology can create a solid foundation for children to prevent their expossure to harmful content.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12420382166 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62734993216 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585987261146 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7059981477 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.266666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149607929312 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597486391275 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692608954101 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114462638431 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793944702355 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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