Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People when in young age are more influenceable by their living environment. Their environment can be family or school or what they watch on the TV. The growth age's the most important year in the formation of people's behavior and thoughts. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that movies and television content must be In terms of viewers age is limited because Inappropriate content of movies and TV programs negative influence on the young people. Personally, I agree with this statement due to various reasons, two of which I'm going to elaborate upon to substantiate my viewpoint in the following essay.
First and foremost, Young people are more than others watching TV and especially movies because of this more impact of TV on this age of people. Influencing the TV and its content can be beneficial or harmful. For instance, my brother every day watched TV and after a while, we see his behavior He was violent and aggressive and tended to engage with others. After reviewing the movies that Bradham was watching, we found that he was watching violent movies with violent content.
Secondly, movies and contents which provide to present on TV are all under the review of the Council of Experts, and all of them are determined by age. Due to the vulnerability of young people in society to bad and inappropriate content, rules should be set so that people of different ages can see certain content.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned points, I firmly believe that young people can be more influenced by TV content. This is because not only bad and inappropriate content can increase negative effects on young people, but also It can change the behavior and thoughts of young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92041522491 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413284272 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519031141869 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9997310374 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.384615385 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170045136737 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663870323217 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451614356347 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111824330881 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387926445514 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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