Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Blessed are those children in previous generations without the vast influence of television and unhealthy traits of movies. The way our children act directly stems from the programs showing on the television, media and movies they watch. Since they are not mature enough to decide among programs and choose a right source to be inspired from, they are highly apt to gain variety of deficient behaviors. From my vantage point, adolescence Imitation from those sources, lower time for studying and advertisement impacts are the essential factors that will harm our children's depositions.
In the first place, the way kids copy some inappropriate behaviors and employ them as to communicate with their peers and even families is worth of considering. Since they are characterized with fragile level of maturity they can easily attain any behavior they come up with in movies whether it is right or not. For example, a child who is watching Halk movie may find its strength appealing to show to his classmate. The outcome would be a crisis in his school.
Similarly, the more time children allocate to movies or so the less educative they would become. By spending plenty of times watching incredible movies tied with special effects, we cannot assume our future society to encompass eminent figures. Needless to say, these TV-addiction of youngsters would not take them any further than a very ordinary individuals that lack of some sort of skills. For instance, a kid who is addicted to watch a long series of a cartoon would harm hi/her studying time and end up with lower grade by the end of the semester, and in a long run with no high paying job offers.
Last but not least, advertising plays a key role impacting children behaviors. Not only do our kids like those amusing commercial but their behaviors would be effected wrongly as well. They would find more cookies, more unhealthy fast foods and more wealthy people favorable. For instance, by watching TV they can crave on some specific sort of cookies or chocolate that are indeed detrimental to their diets. They even may find rich yet cruel people more reasonable. In particular, the movie called “The Wolf of Wall street” has a wealthy character with bad behaviors that may seem enjoyable to children as their role model in not-to-distant future.
To put it in a nutshell, television and movies are of detriment to kids than to their benefit. Nonetheless some parents may allow their offspring to watch them, I am of the opposing view due to children’s lack of maturity, impacts of advertising and effects on their study pattern.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nonetheless, similarly, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in particular, sort of, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99082568807 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74511678981 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557339449541 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1008869092 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124419611624 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408899947836 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030331048083 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0729416205674 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276592920736 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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