Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Television can play an essentional role in young people's life. Some groups of people believe that television has a positive effect on teenagers. However, other groups may take the opposite side. From my vantage point, I firmly believe that the television impacts young adults life. I will elaborate on my reaons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the television by braodcasting violent scene can affect young people mentality. Scychologically speaking, young people do not have the proper perception to differentiate between imagination and reality. They imitate what they watch and pretend that they are the main character in real world. I heard recently that a young child killed five students in his school in the USA. These violant behavior come from television movies, which can affect teenagers brain unwittingly.
Moreover, young people spend a lot of time watching programs and shows on the television, which can neglect them from studing their lessons and school's materials. the television by providing amusing and intresting programs, trys to attract as many as possible viwers. However, this can imapct the students performance in school or university. When I was younger I like to watch television a lot. I followed each series that the television showed and spent my time without any consideration to my homeworks. As a result, my performance in highschool drastically decreased and I failed to pass my courses. Next year, I decided to reduce watching television time. Surprisingly, I had more time to study and concentrate on my lessons and I passed all my courses.
Finally, television by creating untrue advertisements trys to sale the unnecessary products to the target market which in this case, are young adults. Advertisements by conveying untrue messages and creating a high quality images of a product, trys to sale as many as possible. In this trend, companies can boost their sales and make a lot of profit. Young people cannot understand the true meaning of these commercials and buy those commadity even they do not desire for them.
In conclusion, in my opinion television can impact young people negatively. It not can impact their mental health by creating unappropriate scene, but also takes their time and prevent them to be successful in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: adults'; adult's
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...ng their lessons and schools materials. the television by providing amusing and int...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...le viwers. However, this can imapct the students performance in school or university. Wh...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts performance in school or university. When I was younger I like to watch televisio...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'image'?
...ue messages and creating a high quality images of a product, trys to sale as many as p...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20540540541 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94980654551 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8080977811 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.25 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4166666667 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15524831473 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489608602852 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508450127487 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909078106302 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042663076502 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.