Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainment has tremendous leverage on our quotidian routine life. It influence in a direct and in intangible way. It is utterly important to appreciate its effect because of its indelible impact on the society. Although some people hold the viewpoint that Movies and television have positive effects on the youth. However, others may hold a different intellect and disagree with this notion. My personal and actual observation of life which has led me to agree with the idea that these entertainment have more withdrawal impact on the young people.In the following essay, I shall delve into most outstanding reasons.
To commence with, many TV programs hold a violence in their show or movies and this in turn makes the adolescence to imitate these shows. Many of these programs showed on TV without control by the government. For instance, many horror movies being shown on Friday nights which is the night that most of the family gathered to watch them. Besides the fear that produce inside them,Many are try to imitate the actors in some movement that may cause harm to others.My nephew cause bad injury to his little sister when use knifes to make some Ninja movement and put her in hospital for two days trying to stop the bleading and cure her wounds. Apparently, it must be taken into account that without these programs and show, the children will behave properly without any violence.
In addition, some advertisement that provided on TV made for unhealthy foods and encourage juvenile people to buy them. For example, during many programs and movies on TV supply an ad for choclates, chips, and fast foods. Those indeed, effect our young people health negatively and cause nmany health problems as they ask to buy their parents to buy it. In view of the fact that many published journals reveal about the bad impact of those advertismnet on TV on adolescent's health as increase on diabietes, obesity, and myriad of unhealthy habits.
To sum up, after contemplating the reasons which I mentioned before, taking all the factors into consideration, I would reinforce my idea that many TV programs and Movies have withdrawal effect on youth because of the violent message they carry and the way that persuade those young people to buy harmful advertisement product that shown during the program. Accordingly, I believe it is literelly important to control those programs and take permission from specilist agencies to provide clean and positive programs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, besides, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0612745098 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66264361866 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553921568627 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.9850257422 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.470588235 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17490358432 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552216501188 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638776457984 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112244498403 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739728918417 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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