Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The world is changing consistently, and every moment new devices and technologies become available. Each progress has its own advantages and disadvantages, and moveis and televisions are not an exception of this fact. Although some people believe that television's merits outweigh its demerits on account of facilitating learning process, I disagree with this outlook. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to support my viewpoint.
First and foremost, decreasing physical and mental health is one of the significant disadvantages of moveis and televisions. It goes without saying that today's young people are engaged in sedentary activities much more than the previous generations that lead to less pgysical activities and consequently, obesity which is the major reason of a lot of physical deseases. Furthermore, watching movies and televisions adversely affects young people's eyesight.This situation gets worse by the ivention of movies and televisions since young people spend a considerable portion of their time on them. Additionally, in this environments, youngsters become socially isoalted because they communicate with their peers to much less degree than before. After a while, they become depressed and frustarted due to lack of active role in thesociety. A recent survey conducted in the best university of my country verified the mentioned assertions. More than 50 percent of youths in countries which spend a considerable amount of their time on watching televisions suffer from mental disorders while in other contries, it is less than percent of such people.
Moreover, young people are not experienced enough and can be affceted by celebrities easily. It is crystal clear that some televion programs and movies contain negative behaviors which spread quickly among young people who are rawness and invest a lot time on watching them. The more young people watch television programs, the more chance to be influenced. To illustrate, consider my own experience as an example. When I was at high school, a famous actor appeared on television with an unusual hair style while he was smoking. Although his hair style was not acceltable ethically, and a lot of people were aware of catastrophic results of smoking, they spreaded through my country, and almost all young people followed them. The rate of addiction increased remarkabely and lower the quality of life in my country. It demonstarted the negative effects of television and movies.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned details and examples, I think that negative effects of movies and television are more than their positive effects. This is because not only do they decreased the physical and mental health of youngsters, but also they can change the way of youong people' lives which lead to their failure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, while, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40546697039 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99913939258 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544419134396 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8577533543 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265815729253 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741206172635 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695863716282 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158294760289 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320857606108 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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