Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Psychologically speaking, offering children rewards in response to their high marks is a remarkable way for motivating them to progress and become prosperous. Although there are different kinds of awards, and each of them has its own advantages and disadvantages, I believe that money is the best choice. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to support my outlook.
First and foremost, monetory awards are by far the best incentive for children. It is crystal clear that human beings like money, and children are not separted. As a result, parents motivate their children considerably by determining a reward for their success. My own experience is a compelling example. When I was the first year of my school, I did not enjoy studying and sepecifically problem solving. At the same time, I stuck to an impressive toy which was very intersseting for me. My mother said me if I try hard and got full mark in mathmathics, she will give me money required for buying the mentioned toy. This suggestion was very persuasive for me and inspired me significantly. I studid hard for three month and finally, I reached my goal. Neved did I reach the point I am here without building a strong foundation in mathmathics thanks to monetory gifts.
Moreover, improving personal characteristics is another profound advantage of giving money as a reward to children. Children learn to be patient and perseverence to find what they want. Nothing is obtained easily in the materialistic world in which we live and, you should sacrifice some things to gain some more valuable ones. Being offered money by their parents, children are confronted this fact from the early ags and learn to manage that. To illustarete, consider my cousin as an example. When he was at school, his parents gave him anything he wanted without determing any condition for him. He did not study hard and could not enter the university. The older he became, the more request he had, and his behaviors resulted in catastrophic consequences for him and his family. If he realizeed the fact that anything in this world is based on tradeoff, he will not be as offfenve as he is today.
In conslusion, based on the aforementioned details and examples, I think that giving money as a reward to children is a good idea. Not only do children become motivated in this way, but also they can develop their personality and become prepare for their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
...was very intersseting for me. My mother said me if I try hard and got full mark in m...
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Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
... significantly. I studid hard for three month and finally, I reached my goal. Neved d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, so, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90731707317 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93586005142 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563414634146 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7908748263 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8333333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0833333333 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261485943418 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643474645177 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504929101724 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163221035525 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370747414678 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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