Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
Televisions have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to possess at least one tv for each family because they are deemed as a source of entertainment that help to get rid of the stress and built up tension of their stressful lives, in addition, they provide us with the world handy-tips, however, most of television's programs are filled with illusion and violence that might lead to twisting kids ' view of life. Therefore, I believe that the cons of these implements overweight their pros due to its effects in both of hampering the communication and reducing the educational level.
To begin with, the new technological development that happens within the contemporary era, a verity of new options and characteristics have been added to television and they had been called smart tv. Indeed, children who are fascinating in watching tv, are now able to connect their gadgets with the internet and looking for all the movies and programs they want, thus, this will reflect negatively on their personalities. For instance, instead of communicating and interacting with the people surrounding them, they will squander their leisure time in watching films, so, they will lose their social skills as they will not able to contact effectively with their family's members which will, in turn, affect their capability to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively, so, they will suffer a lot in the future because they lack such a skill. In contrast, those kids who do not use to waste their time in these programs, they will be successful because they will spend their time to instill the solid foundation of the interpersonal relationships which have a great influence on their future workflow and productivity. Consequently, parents should pay attention to their children and learn them how to manage their priorities, so that they will not consume most of their time in watching tv.
Second, it is critical to surge the kids at an early age to improve their educational level because this will assist them to guide our nation to progress. In fact, watching movies may lead to creating inhuman zombi unable to communicate and learn easily. For example, my little brother always tempts to sway to play video games and use the big tv screen or watching movies by phone in an inappropriate such as at the classroom, that what led him to avoid focusing on teacher's valuable lessons, thus, this will narrow their horizon and decrease their intellectual ability. In conclusion, in order to have optimal studying skills, parents must advocate their children to spend their spare time in studying rather than electronic games.
To sum up, tv may provides the offspring with new behaviors which are maybe good or bad, if they are fitted the standard norms and influence our daily life such as eating healthy food, they will be good, but, if they lead to a bad demeanor such as unethical attitude, they will consider bad, so, taking care of our kids from these is essential because they are the pillars and the powers of their communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the televisions') or simply say ''most televisions''.
Suggestion: most of the televisions; most televisions
... us with the world handy-tips, however, most of televisions programs are filled with illusion and v...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iolence that might lead to twisting kids view of life. Therefore, I believe that ...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ill. In contrast, those kids who do not use to waste their time in these programs, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2572.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00389105058 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76435251722 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538910505837 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.72139734 48.9658058833 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 197.846153846 100.406767564 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5384615385 20.6045352989 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.3076923077 5.45110844103 281% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0747915657089 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362285057256 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212424201053 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.049404373505 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258793098417 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 11.7677419355 186% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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