The issue here is whether young people in Koea is having a better life today than our parents hav enjoyed when they were young. I strongly agree to the point, and my view can be greatly substantiated by the reasons addressed below.
Firstly, young people today in a world with great health service than our parents did. In Korea, there were huge improvement of medical services and health insurance. The quality of hosptal and health experts have improved from the past and now our nation is on the lead of Medicine throughout the world. Also, with the development of cities, accessibility to the hospitals improved, so people nowadays can reach to big hospitals within ten minutes regardless of where they live. Furthermore, Korean government invested a huge budget on the health insurance, enabling any citizens take benefit of high quality medical care with reasonable price. So, young people today are the chief beneficiaries of health service improvement since they got high quality care since their pediatric life. This storng foundation of health service will continue benefit the young until the time they become elders and need some geriatric care.
In addition, young people today in Korea are living in a politically stable nation. Twenty years ago, Korea was under the jackboot of a dictatorial regime. Even though Korea was a still a democratic society on paper, people were under pressure of the military government, and freedom of expression and ideological rebel were not allowed by the government. Our parents generation actively revolted against the dictatorship, by sacrificing their youth and lives. Young generation live on the strong political foundation our parents had built. Recently, we are both constitutionally and virtually allowed to freely express our opinion. Political freedom makes the life of young people another level up.
Finally, young people of today benefit from diverse job opportunities. In Korea, there were no natural resources and people had to make strenuous effort for development. For instance, majority of young people twenty years ago participated in manufacturing, agricultural industries and sometimes in very difficult jobs such as mining and nursing. Sometimes people had to woautonaurk abroad regardless of their preference. Thanks to their effort, Korea's GDP has increased tenth times than the GDP two decades ago. Today, young people have less regards to money or patriotic motivation when choosing a job. They have more choices, and they are more autonomous when chooosing their career. This autonomy really makes the young peolple's life better than our parent's generation.
In conclusion, I personally belive that young people in Korea is having a better life today than our parents have enjoyed when they were young. This is because young people of today are the beneficiaries of great health service, political security, and more career opportunity. These conditions definitely makes young people today to have a better life compared to the past generations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 538, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun regards is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, really, so, still, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37106918239 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77554199806 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522012578616 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4524983573 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2962962963 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454813404187 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135675205547 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125432421884 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311570642781 0.150856017488 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115668677435 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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