Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
There has been a serious debate among people about how our children should be ready for adult life. When it comes to this issue, some people believe that children should only focus on their study and don't participate in other works while some others disagree and claim that children should attend in some part-time jobs while they are studying their lessons to be ready for their adult lives. From my point of view, I suppose that the second idea carries more weight due to some reasons which I will explain.
Above all, there is an old proverb which says: "people can't understand the value of money unless they achieve it on their own." In other words, if we always give money to the children, they won't figure out how it is valuable and how parents should work too hard to make ends meet. So, they spend it on something which aren't worthwhile. For instance, my cousin always asked his father to give him a large amount of money to play in some clubs. In my opinion, that was a complete waste of money, but he did it. When his father sent him to a photocopy store as a part-time job, he no longer went to those clubs since he found out how the money is valuable.
The second reason why I feel that way is about time management. When children have a part-time job, they have a limited time to study their lessons. Hence, they will understand how they should manage their time. Take my younger brother for example, when he took a part-time job, he got better grades in his lessons. He explained that how taking a part-time job lead to manage his time better than previous. So, it is not a big deal for children and they can make it.
The other reason which deserves some words is that by taking a part-time job, children can put their energy into something that result in better condition for them. To be more exact, it can prevent them to take part in some events that are not appropriate for them. My neighbor's child is a compelling example of that. He used to go to some clubs to use his energy and he usually stay out till 2 AM which were really detrimental for him. But after he took a part-time job, he usually comes home at about 8 PM.
In conclusion, given the facts that by taking a part-time job, children will understand the value of money, will manage their time more efficient and will be able to put their energy into effective things. As a result, I strongly agree with that statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: aren't
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stays'.
Suggestion: stays
... clubs to use his energy and he usually stay out till 2 AM which were really detrime...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, really, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i suppose, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46726862302 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26398344125 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487584650113 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2411737051 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2380952381 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27609976717 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926559290491 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698482278397 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171178902283 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586385569669 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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