Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
I think that the question whether money is the main indicator of people's success is a controversial one. Some people believe that only one who earns a lot of money is successful. However, other people think one who does not earn a lot of money can be successful too. I disagree with this opinion that people who earn a lot of money are successful. I think success is more than how much money you make. In my opinion, a person can be considered as a successful person, if he/she reaches his/her desirable goal.
There are many rich people in the world whom people do not believe in their successful because they have not any respect in their families and society. Without respect, money means a little. For instance, Mahatma Gandhi was a most successful leader in the world. Many people respect to him and his ideas, but he did not have enough money. There are people who are talented in a great variety of fields. For them being successful means being respected for their work and receiving appreciation for theirs efforts and realizations. In other words, artists such as actors, singers, painters, writers want to expose their works, and to gain recognition at a high level.
Those people who earn a lot of money are able to make some of their dreams come true, such as living in more comfortable houses, traveling everywhere around the globe, having their best cars. They need not worry about paying their bills or fulfilling their children’s desires. For instance, if their children want to go abroad for further studies, they can send them to one of the best and well-known universities. On the other hand, rich people are not always happy. They might have serious health problems, or they might think that something misses from their lives because of their greed/graciousness.
When we think of history, we remember few people simply because they were rich. Overall, we remember people who did something with their lives － they were influential in politics, or contributed to science, art, or religion. If history is the final judge of success, therefore money surely is not everything.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
I think that the question whether money is the main indicator of peoples ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88547486034 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66873823935 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533519553073 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3856194728 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2857142857 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0476190476 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260746208552 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101461339561 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134416051764 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163034141674 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12413953334 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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