Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For psychologists and social scientists, the influence of celebrities is always a fascinating topic. Personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that celebrities influence the younger generation more than the elderly. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the older generation like to gather information from celebrities. This is probably because the older society is more hierarchy-based than today. Obedience is the most important part of a hierarchy-based structure. Therefore, the elderly are easily affected by well-known people, especially celebrities on TV. An experience of my grandparents is a compelling example of this. They have been following a political TV program called “Gondola's Show” for many years. The host of the show is called Celest Chen, who always provides biased opinions and misleading facts. Her opinions will definitely not be accepted by the younger generation. However, her words are always valued by my grandparents. The situation gets worse when it comes to voting, where older people trust celebrities rather than making decisions by themselves.
Secondly, as an old Taiwanese saying goes, old dogs refuse to learn new knowledge, which means older people are stubborn and are unwilling to change. Usually, older people choose to trust celebrities because they don’t prefer finding resources by themselves. The older generation have limited computer skills and virtually have no access to the internet. Lack of dedicated online searching tools makes them unable to gather information or resources from a different perspective. Hence, have to trust celebrities no matter what the truth is.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities influence the older generation more than the young. This is because the elderly like to trust the opinions of celebrities and because they are not as well educated as younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56711409396 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08300700782 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570469798658 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.345808332 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.95 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189673647486 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550286053215 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481094625724 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122247693021 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361264177274 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.43 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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