Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern society, there is quite a large obsession, especially with the younger generations over celebrities and their lifestyles. opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are exerting an increasing impact on people. An interesting question, along the booming of celebrity culture, emerges and ignites a heated debate. do celebrities' opinions play a more important role in influencing younger people than they do in influencing older people? some people tend to say yes, but others do not see it in the same way as the supporters do. As far as I am concerned, the issue should be discussed on a case-by-case analysis.
it is evident that celebrity culture remains dominant in larger cities. Indeed, almost all teenagers in urban areas view celebrities as their role models and these celebrities have a great influence on their appearance and attitude. The reasons behind this phenomenon are multifold. In big cities, the affluent economy and high technology make it possible for teenagers to have access to celebrities. In a society where money is of less concern, people have inclination to pay more attention to their leisure needs, which drives an active entertainment industry in urban areas. living in the technological era, social networking platforms such as Twitter and Facebook are narrowing the distance between celebrities and teenagers. through social media, teenagers can potentially get rapid responses from their idols or can be directly involved in their idol's work and life. this quick response and high involvement solidify the idol-fan relationship. As for different degrees of this celebrity effect on younger versus older people, the impact on younger people far outweighs the impact on older people. young people are still establishing their identity, so they need to find a role model. Accordingly, most of them tend to view celebrities including entertainers and professional athletes as their examples to imitate.
In spite of the reasons for celebrities having a greater impact on younger people in big cities, it is ungrounded to assume this kind of impact still exists with young people living in remote villages. Again, the first reason is economical and basic human needs. What concerns people living in remote villages is still their basic needs, and therefore, they are less passionate about entertainment and celebrities. Another reason is outdated technology. Due to remoteness and poor transportation, modern technology does not prove to be a boon for people in rural areas. As a result, young people can hardly gain access to information about celebrities. When young people in rural areas try to develop their identity, they are more likely to seek guidance from their parents, relatives, neighbors and historical figures instead of celebrities. there is no doubt the celebrity effect will be weak. Even though they may know some celebrities through TV, the huge distance will further weaken this minute effect. In all, in the setting of remote areas, one can assume celebrities' opinions are less important to younger people.
As analyzed above, it can be concluded that the statement in question is tenable in some cases but it does not apply to all circumstances. To be specific, you may say that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people in the context of big cities, but it is too over-generalized to assume this phenomenon also exists in remote areas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, as for, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, in some cases, in spite of, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2942.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28186714542 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93398141171 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482944344704 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3584504599 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.448275862 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2068965517 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31034482759 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263425095181 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695568527688 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767276190447 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189288171324 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680588287802 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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