Tpo46
The professor challenges the advantages of storing patients' medical records in electronic databases over traditional paper-based record keeping by stating that the benefits of electronic medical records are uncertain.
The reading first mentions that electronic medical records help to save money on storing and transferring medical records. The lecturer casts doubts on this by saying the cost saving is unlikely to be as significant as the reading suggests. doctors still need their paper-based medical records in case of an emergency. Also, paper records signed by the doctors are needed for legal reasons. Although doctors may use electronic record keeping, storage costs for paper based record keeping will still need to be paid.
The reading next mentions electronic medical records are essential in reducing the occurrences of medical errors. The lecturer argues against this stating that errors still exist in electronic medical records. doctors take notes while examining patients, which makes it impossible to avoid illegible handwriting. Later, office workers enter the information electronically and must interpret what doctors have written, which can lead to errors.
Finally, the reading passage claims that electronic medical records can benefit medical research, but this is refuted by the lecturer. because medical information is subject to strict privacy laws in the United states, and obtaining data requires complicated procedures and varying degrees of permission. In most cases, access is denied because patients can block the use of their medical records for any purpose other than their own medical treatment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...oring and transferring medical records. The lecturer casts doubts on this by saying...
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Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Doctors
...as significant as the reading suggests. doctors still need their paper-based medical re...
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Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Doctors
...ll exist in electronic medical records. doctors take notes while examining patients, wh...
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Line 13, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...h, but this is refuted by the lecturer. because medical information is subject to stric...
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Line 13, column 248, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires complicated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'complicating' or 'to be complicated'.
Suggestion: complicating; to be complicated
...ted states, and obtaining data requires complicated procedures and varying degrees of permi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, still, while, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77049180328 5.08290768461 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68930853724 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565573770492 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0584058452 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.307692308 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.655199462472 0.272083759551 241% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.251473119154 0.0996497079465 252% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145135652103 0.0662205650399 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.442060162107 0.162205337803 273% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856599558615 0.0443174109184 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 53.8541721854 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.2367328918 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.