Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, famous celebrities are the most interesting people in each society, and they have an enormous influence on their community. Personally, I believe that youngsters praise the ideas of famous artists and athletes more than adult people. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, juveniles want to find a particular person to follow their ideas as a behavioral pattern. Recent studies have shown that young people tend to imitate celebrities in detail, such as their clothes, cars, and hairstyles. In other words, famous artists and sportspeople are role models for youngsters that have an ample effect on their life. In addition, celebrities motivate and encourage young people to make progress in different fields. My personal experience is a compelling example in this regard. About five years ago, one of the best football players is my favorite athlete, so I was trying to be like him on various occasions. He was donating his money and time to help patients whom their cost of treatment was enormously high. Therefore, I have started spending my time to assist ill people who had nobody to care for them. Now, I am proud of myself because of such humanitarian activities, which I owe it all to that famous football player.
Second, nowadays, youngsters are more familiar with social media, so they have access to different information about celebrities. Juveniles know everything about famous people like their achievements, lifestyle, and private life. Therefore, young people are going to be inclined to behave and wear clothes like them. However, it is vital that a smart and intelligent atmosphere must be provided in which young people can follow famous people wisely.
In conclusion, I opine that juveniles nowadays tend to behave like celebrities more than adults. This is because they always seek particular people to behave like them, and thanks to social media, which young people are more familiar with it, they can gain lots of information about celebrities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
... and sophisticated world where we live, famous celebrities are the most interesting people in each...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14782608696 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75412047378 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547826086957 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9289422178 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16755767244 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537653377955 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390455452668 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118149031535 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294088066534 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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