Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people says that the opinions of celebrities are equally important to the younger and older people because the celebrities are counted as successful people in the society and opinions from the successful people is always important for the people of all age. However, I strongly disagree with the people and agree with the statement that the opinion of the celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athlets are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I think this way for two reasons.
First of all, in most of the cases younger people follow the celebrities and the number of older people, who follow celebrities, are very small because the younger people are more excited with their life and older people become more pragmatic. For example, during the younger age of my father he followed the Shahrukh Khan, the Bollywood superstar. In our family photo album, I have seen that my father used to take the Shahrukh's appearance, and my mother said that at that period my father used to copy Shahrukh's dialogue. However, at the present state my father, an older citizen of the country of about sixty years old, rarely follows his superstar. The example shows that when people become older their excitement in the life started to reduce and become more practical, and they get their own philosophy about the life. Thus, the opinions and activities of celebrities become less important to the older people.
Seccod of all, younger people have time to reach their goal in life, they want to become someone in their favorite field, but older people have less scope to fulfill their aim. Older people already know that who they are and what is possible by them. For instance, when I was child, I was wanted to be cricketer and followed the cricketers, specially Shacin Tendulkar. I remember, I used to follow his every steps, styles and tried to watch every programs on the television. His speech and suggestion was like the holy massege to me. Notwithstanding, when I have grown up, I realized that I had lost the age to fulfill my dream and I had not enough time to be cricketer. The matter of fact that when I started to realize in that way, the importance of Shachin Tendulkar started to declining in my life, and now, I rarely follow Shachin. The example illustrates that at the young stage of a person has the scope to fulfill the dream and has the courage to reach the goal, so the celbrities in that field become important for the person. As a result, the opinions of the celebrities is important to the younger people not for the older people.
In conlcusion, in some cases, an older person may follow celebrities, but in general, opinions of celebrities are more important to the younger people than they are to older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in general, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78079331942 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55315994472 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415448851775 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.8421963212 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.526315789 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41311834539 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136799838484 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148638826613 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308675492254 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119784626724 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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